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never break a writer’s heart
because your name
will forever belong to us.

you will sign it
into every broken bit
and one day, you’ll open a book
with yourself
next to the words
"let me tell you about the time
i was hurt."

--

never break a poet’s heart
because between the beat
of the stanzas,
you’ll hear that heartbeat,
hammering harder
proving you wrong
with every line.

--

never break a writer’s heart
because we will take the pain
and make it into something
you could never live down.

you could live with heart monitors,
that measured the damaged pulse,
doctors who told you,
“she's critical.”

but you can’t live with the bold strokes,
smooth as a flatline,
that accuse you of being
the best thing
that’s ever happened to them.

you can’t live with it;
our soulmate, now writing.

You, now replaced
by a pen.

--



never break anybody’s heart
because you’ll cut yourself
on the pieces of it.

and see, hearts heal.
scars don’t.
Two submission in two days.
There's three more to go, so buckle up.


Also, have some Pablo Neruda:
Well, now
If little by little you stop loving me
I shall stop loving you
Little by little
If suddenly you forget me
Do not look for me
For I shall already have forgotten you.
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Dannny-Deviant Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love this. Reminds me of the song "Sad Songs and Waltzes" by Cake in which he basically says the girl who broke his heart is lucky because sad songs and waltzes aren't selling so no one will ever hear his song. 
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Michael-the-writer Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beatiful. I love this very much
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sergeantnick98 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
i love this
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014   Writer
Thank you.
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Shadowvampireninja Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow I love this- it's so true.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   Writer
Thank you. :love:
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Shadowvampireninja Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
While I like the precedence of this poem, I didn't find it as original.

I'll explain:

I like the way the poem's divided, I like the technique, I especially love the "she's critical" portion (its a bit of experience acting out on that side, really), and well, I have had such moments in my life as well which are portrayed by this poem.

I just think that the originality of this piece has been talked about often. The last portion, somehow, reminded me of Samuel Beckett's "Four Cascandos" significantly. I've read plenty that talk about the nature of scars, and how they are in the end a significant part of us, but I feel that eventually, its in the middle of things - its talking about the storm, and what made the storm, but not when the storm will leave.

Which makes sense - a writer's scars are a sad and painful matter and they leave a lot to bear. But they can be made to become less... prominent. Too much prominence results in self-indulgence. Self-indulgence makes revenge too consuming, and hence that vengeance can become a consumptive mania. That's a dangerous place to go to - its where ego starts to build up.

If placed in terms of stars, I'll give this poem:

4.5/5 for impact
5/5 for vision and technique
4/5 for originality

Its a good poem, mind you, but just not something I'm personally willing to give preference for a second read.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014   Writer
Understandable. This was a rant more than anything, so it certainly wasn't my deepest piece.
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shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(nodding) I featured this and the other work. For the literature-roadtrip.
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JadedStrayHyena Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Got me from the first stanza. As a writer, this really went straight to the heart.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
I'm glad you could relate. :)
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PTDaHood Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013   Writer
Our soulmate. Let's put those heartbeats in a place where they'll live forever.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013   Writer
:heart: Poetry.
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:iconptdahood:
PTDaHood Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2013   Writer
:iconbigheartplz:
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Uncagedchiken Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i am a writer so i engoyed reading this
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2013   Writer
I'm glad to hear. <3
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WitchWingofLightClan Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2013  Student
This is great stuff, honestly
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much.
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Ashbrie13 Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013  Student General Artist
This is a really deep piece of work, amazing job expressing emotions. :)
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2013   Writer
Thank you so much. :heart:
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:iconcjnwriter:
cjnwriter Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, that's really great.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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:iconb-rs:
B-RS Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing work. :) :clap:
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013   Writer
Thank you so very much!
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ReallyLostMyMind Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Student Writer
This was fantastic. The power behind the words really shone, and it did intimidate me a little so that I sat in fear, hoping that I had never broken a writer's heart. All of the different ways of using the heart worked really well: the idea of them hiding between the stanzas hammering out the beat, the idea of heart monitors being okay but the writing being a flatline resounding in your ears, and the thought that broken hearts are sharp enough to cut yourself on are all wonderful additions tot he piece. Overall, it was gorgeously done.
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2013   Writer
That's so sweet. :heart: Thank you very much.
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A-Wakefield Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
May we feature this in the favorites folder at #Co-ArtSational? :D
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013   Writer
Of course!
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A-Wakefield Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :hug: :D
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Bubble-Ribbon Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This was a beautiful piece ^^  and also true.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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thefadedpanda Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow that's really deep :D (Big Grin) Should be published.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconunknown-loverforever:
Beautiful end, with a sad truth in whole. Loved it ^^
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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Crimsonoid Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Student Digital Artist
(oh see you again =O)

Omg. This is just an awesome piece! Cause there are just how cracked my feelings are right now...
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
Thank you! :D
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TheGoddessEpona Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This one of those things I rarely come across where I just sit and marvel in its beauty.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
:love: That's very sweet of you.
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Lindsfluff Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2013
Wow, this is amazing, and absolutely true. Great job!
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :meow:
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Vivi-Chuu Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student Digital Artist
This has really grabbed my attention!~ I really loved this poem ^^
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013   Writer
:heart: Thanks!
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Vivi-Chuu Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You're very Welcome!~
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zebratophat88 Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
oh. oh this is just wonderful and flowing and .. felt. =) nice nice poem
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you very much. :)
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The-Reluctant-Nebula Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student General Artist
this is beautiful, great job ^^
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013   Writer
Thank you!
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The-Reluctant-Nebula Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2013  Student General Artist
your welcome ^^
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