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never break a writer’s heart
because your name
will forever belong to us.

you will sign it
into every broken bit
and one day, you’ll open a book
with yourself
next to the words
"let me tell you about the time
i was hurt."


never break a poet’s heart
because between the beat
of the stanzas,
you’ll hear that heartbeat,
hammering harder
proving you wrong
with every line.


never break a writer’s heart
because we will take the pain
and make it into something
you could never live down.

you could live with heart monitors,
that measured the damaged pulse,
doctors who told you,
“she's critical.”

but you can’t live with the bold strokes,
smooth as a flatline,
that accuse you of being
the best thing
that’s ever happened to them.

you can’t live with it;
our soulmate, now writing.

You, now replaced
by a pen.


never break anybody’s heart
because you’ll cut yourself
on the pieces of it.

and see, hearts heal.
scars don’t.
Two submission in two days.
There's three more to go, so buckle up.

Also, have some Pablo Neruda:
Well, now
If little by little you stop loving me
I shall stop loving you
Little by little
If suddenly you forget me
Do not look for me
For I shall already have forgotten you.
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sergeantnick98 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
i love this
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014   Writer
Thank you.
Shadowvampireninja Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Wow I love this- it's so true.
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014   Writer
Thank you. :love:
Shadowvampireninja Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
While I like the precedence of this poem, I didn't find it as original.

I'll explain:

I like the way the poem's divided, I like the technique, I especially love the "she's critical" portion (its a bit of experience acting out on that side, really), and well, I have had such moments in my life as well which are portrayed by this poem.

I just think that the originality of this piece has been talked about often. The last portion, somehow, reminded me of Samuel Beckett's "Four Cascandos" significantly. I've read plenty that talk about the nature of scars, and how they are in the end a significant part of us, but I feel that eventually, its in the middle of things - its talking about the storm, and what made the storm, but not when the storm will leave.

Which makes sense - a writer's scars are a sad and painful matter and they leave a lot to bear. But they can be made to become less... prominent. Too much prominence results in self-indulgence. Self-indulgence makes revenge too consuming, and hence that vengeance can become a consumptive mania. That's a dangerous place to go to - its where ego starts to build up.

If placed in terms of stars, I'll give this poem:

4.5/5 for impact
5/5 for vision and technique
4/5 for originality

Its a good poem, mind you, but just not something I'm personally willing to give preference for a second read.
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014   Writer
Understandable. This was a rant more than anything, so it certainly wasn't my deepest piece.
shehrozeameen Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
(nodding) I featured this and the other work. For the literature-roadtrip.
JadedStrayHyena Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Got me from the first stanza. As a writer, this really went straight to the heart.
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
I'm glad you could relate. :)
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