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last summer i tried
to use the words that you fell asleep to
to write you a love song but
every time i tried
my fingers froze up.

i failed the test of describing you
in a paragraph
in a sentence
in a word
because

there is nothing in my head adequate enough
(worthy enough)
to describe how you look
on the train station platform
when you smile at me.

i can tell you that
my heart climbs into my throat and
my body prickles with heat and
everything disappears, for just a moment, but

the thing i cannot describe
is you.

your mouth caresses my name
like it’s the most beautiful sound
it’ll ever know,
like it understands me perfectly,
but you,
you are not made of verses.
you have no meter.
you are not written in stanzas
that i understand
and i find myself captivated
at how beautifully complex
your language is.

you say i’m the mesmerizing one, but, baby,
you've stumped me.

you have left a girl,
a writer,
a person who wants to build their life
with words,

speechless.
For Conor.
This was supposed to be a Valentine's Day poem but I couldn't resist. 
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sweet-garlic Featured By Owner 1 day ago  New member Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. This is heartfelt, I can tell. :love:
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M4geOfSp4ce Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
<3
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Rovelae Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gosh dangit, Cobalt. . . .:iconcannotevenplz: Somebody's just too amazing.
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capricecake Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Student Writer
i might share this with the one i love, let your words do the talking for me.
as a writer, it'll feel dirty! :b but i might do it anyway.
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner May 25, 2014   Writer
I always appreciate people using my words to convey meanings to others. <3
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capricecake Featured By Owner May 25, 2014  Student Writer
so it happens often, then!
hehe.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
There was one person on my mind while reading this. This is stunning. Powerful. Just. woah. 

Woah.
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014   Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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Desiree407 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014   Writer
**WORD.
Ignore my horrifying typo, good God. 
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014   Writer
So much power in such a small world. 
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Desiree407 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! This poem is beautiful.
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homestucker42 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love the last stanza. When you something truly beautiful and stunning, you can't always described it. 
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014   Writer
Thank you. I've realized, with time, this is definitely one of the best I've ever written. 
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homestucker42 Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :D 
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AlessaNitara Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014
I adore you. I adore your way of writing, I adore your every word. This just needed to be said once again.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014   Writer
Oh God. :blush: That's so kind of you. 
And I adore you, too. <3 
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MaxxToron Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is absolutely beautiful. You took my breath away once again. 
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014   Writer
Thank you! 
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MaxxToron Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Your boyfriend's a lucky guy. 
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014   Writer
I never let him forget it. ;D
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:iconmaxxtoron:
MaxxToron Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
lol. You sound like me when I'm with my girlfriend. 
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Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2014
Beautiful! I hope he liked it!
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2014   Writer
He did. :heart:
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:iconsquiddy-chan:
Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2014
Good. I'm very glad~ :3
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RachelKay30 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014
Wow! :D I love it!
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you!
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kenjiro1 Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Hobbyist
This is great! I love <3 :D
I'm sure that it would make me cry if someone would write something like this for me xD
It's is really beautiful ^_^
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014   Writer
He really enjoyed it. :heart:
And thank you!
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iSaved Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014
This is Beautiful. I Completely understand where you are coming from. I just wish I could have worded it this eloquently
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much. <3 That's very sweet.
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azazelin Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist

god.

if only I was able to tell him this

because these are the words I would use

if only he could hear me.

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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2014   Writer
Did you just wrote poetry in a comment on a poem?
... :clap:

(That last line was breathtaking, btw. :heart: )
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is exactly how I feel about the person I'm in love with... I can't muster up a poem strong enough with words to describe him. This brought tears to my eyes, it's beautiful Heart 
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much. :love:
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xLuckyxFridayx13x Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome :D
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avalanchepark Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014
if only someone would write me a poem like this

now I'm ass deep in melancholy  - but totally worth it
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
:lol: That's actually very touching.
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anticodac Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Safe to say, you've also left me speechless with this poem. Amazing work. 
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
Thank you!
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Student Writer
Wow. This is beautiful. Amazing work. =)
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
Thank you very much. :heart:
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2014  Student Writer
You're welcome =D
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SilverAer Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful. Just beautiful.
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:iconcolbalt-rain:
colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
Thank you!
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grassa48 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Well done.
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2014   Writer
Thank you. <3
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pyrofiend324 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love that this is posted right after your poem about being single.

And I absolutely love this baby! I love you so much!
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colbalt-rain Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014   Writer
I love you, too. :love:
And I'm enjoying the juxtaposition, honestly.
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svenspade09 Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2014

you've put so much of yourself into this, so much of your heart and soul that the reader can almost hear you saying this instead of typing it.

This is magnificent and beautiful way to go.

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